Reviews for Tales of Illyrian

M.R.Sanner
2006-11-07
ch 1,

abusethis is really ahrd to read because of the format ::cries:: I know FP uplaoding thingy is soo weird . I always ahve to go back and put spaces imbetween my paragraphs !

Yah ,anyways on to your story ...

Wow one oclock , I totaly empathize with you ,I ahve pulled those early morning writting sessions a many of times myself .Though most of what I write at that time comes out weird and spastic .Lol .

I like where this is heading ,I like this forest you describe . Everypalce has that one place where it is haunted/cursed/evil and kids dare eachother back and forth to go to the place .Actually in my town , I think we do have such a place, well I think . It's a graveyard ontop of a hill surrounded by a ring of trees ,very creepy and old , and I really want to go up there ,but I'm afraid I'll get shot from the owner of the land .Lol.

Hmm can't wait for the next update ,though I think you should still work on the sleeping beauty story ^ ^ .

Write on .

Confuzzld Me .

aka

M.R.Sanner

Shadows in the Fire
2006-11-03
ch 1,

abuseThe Tales of Illyrian are off to a great start! There is only one thing about it that bothers me--it is written all as one paragraph! I would love to continue to follow the story, but if it isn't sorted out right, I won't be able too :(

My advice is: don't be afraid of an overuse of paragraphs. One hundred is better then one solid block!

Anyways, keep writing! I really want to read the next part!
Checking in later, then?
-Shadow

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