I like it! Please update.

Putting a soul into a pregnant woman and taking over the unborn? For some reason, that reminds me of Kurama of Yu Yu Hakusho. This is almost like fanfiction, but not quite.

Well, this seems fine so far. It would be nice if you added more description, though. And most people use italics when writing thoughts. You don't need to use bold print.

All in all, this isn't bad. Good luck with your writing.

- Dice Darwin of Underground Constellation

Great Job! Can't wait to read more