It's very poetic in the imagery. I like it, but it's a teaser really, one of those poems which I really feel was meant to be more than a poem. A story perhaps. intriguing(sp?), lovely.

A good poem about a fallen boy. I think you could really add to your poems if you used punctuation. Using punctuation can truly guide your reader the way you want them to be led through your poem. Sometimes I'll go into a line thinking it's a continuation of the previous line, but it's a whole new sentence. I think you're doing fine, though.

P.S. it's good to be back :)