Good, and again you have passion for what you write. But here, your rythm is very skewed to fit your rhymes. Try practicing with a meter and ryhmes. You can get it!

So many feelings of discontent. It is hard though, when people won't allow you to be who you are. They grasp you so tightly, that when you finally get out, it hurts even worse. I hope that they can come to realize how beautiful you are, and accept you.

God bless!

-Ashelin