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a silenced revolution 2/6/07 . chapter 1I like the strong feeling of hatred here. Just one thing: "Everything horribleness" doesn't seem to me to go together; they're both nouns. Maybe: Pure wickedness, hatefullness Horribleness and… Or: Pure wickedness, everything Horrible, mean, and... Just an idea though. Sorry if it's my problem because I didn't get something. Isabella-May |
Atheneon 11/11/06 . chapter 1And the list goes on... Who are you describing here? They seem to be a focus of hate for you. A person, an idea maybe? Pure (Evil) Good, the end isn't very powerful as a wrap-up. It seems like you wished to continue your list. |
Basara 11/7/06 . chapter 1wretched? nice... |
Ashelin 11/5/06 . chapter 1Wow, what a cliffhanger. I wonder who this could be. Most likely either God or your father? Well, good poem anyway, and as always, God bless. -Ashelin |