Good piece. I like the title.

~Twilight Starr~

Interesting and well written, though grammar/spelling could be touched up a bit.

Keep writing!

I had bookmarked this story to read as I hadn't had time earlier, and after finishing it I am pleased that I did so.

It smoothly rounds through streams of concious and horror.

I love it.

It's pretty.

Wow! That's really good. I'm really picky about the fiction I read, and I loved it. =) The imagery was awesome, and the ending was great!

It sort-of reminded me of PotO. (Not in an obvious way! It just made me think of it.)

Grammatically, though, you switched from present tense to past in the middle of the third paragraph. No big deal, but I just like to add something constructive to my reviews. x)

(I just found out I can review here without having an account. D'oh!)

That is really good, I love the ending! You closed it perfectly.

Aneis