Very, very nice. Your use of words is something like I've rarely seen on here, though I have not been here overly long. You are great at keeping attention.

Nice, very nice. You make wonderful use of alliteration, constanly using words that start with the letter 'r'. It adds a feeling of agression and incense to the piece, which only the letter 'r' can do! Nice use of r! Nice use of text placement as well, it adds a layer of emotion and disconectivity (word?). But you get what I'm saying, I hope. I could see this being a song, if that wasn't your original plan, that is. Keep up the good work!

-Mad