 Tawny Owl 2009-04-02 . chapter 1Random and funny, yet still disturbingly creepy. I loved the line, ‘No really, I can and it’s creepy.’
I also like the way that we only heard her side of the conversation (sexist? But in chocolate related crimes girl makes sense, right?).
I really enjoyed your attention to detail. The crappy soap being pink, and the fact that she likes coffee. It fleshed out the atmosphere and your character although this was a really short piece. |