The imagery in this so amazing and vivid!

k.X

This is just amazing. I can't even pick a favorite line. I like the idea of the poem, and the way you worded it was so powerful.

oh my oh my

I love the first verse - people hate because they are afraid to love. It is easier for the girls to hate each other because it's their way of feeling so intense an emotion.

There is a twisted - litte girl - like quality in this. 'dies a little death' - Amazing.

The entire poem was brillant. That one expression 'the little death' has always made such an impact on me and I've always wanted to use it in a poem but know that I would not be able to use it as successfully as you.

The last verse in parentheses reads bittersweet and kinda makes me think of heartache.

I like this a lot.. its extremely powerful and I love the random capitalization.. great job

Is this called Volcano Girls after the strip club?

this was perfectly imperfect.

you blow me absolutely away. you always do.

What are the differences? The greatest illusion is the illusion of separation...

Heh, anyways, I wouldn't say this is my favorite, but it's definately up there. Teehee, great job, Kuroi-chan.

Until next time~

twisted and a little sick, but so true to life, and some relationships are just a ring-around-the-rosy like this one.

goddamn, I search for good poetry and I find shitloads.

Sounds good and is good and I'm in love with it.

Goddamn.

Wow. There's just something so deliciously decadent about your poetry, I love it. The last verse is perfection.

pretty...it's nostaglic makes me think of childhood. nice work.

i love that last part, quite delectable overall in that painfully anatagonizing way, hehehehehehehehhehehe...lovely poem