i really like the tone and structure change so dramatically for the last part, it really emphasises the importance and emotion contained in it.

the imagery in the previous four stanzas is good, especially in comparison to the last part. it doesn't stand out too much but it's not bland either.

perhaps look at inserting punctuation however? periods at the end of each stanza and commas within them (as they're short) would help the reader discern how you want it read.

otherwise i really like it.

.:midnight:.