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love you to death 2007-06-01 . chapter 1
nice & cute .
Chaotic Theory 2006-11-07 . chapter 1
There are things I like, and things I don't. THe lack of a rhyme scheme, I like. Too often people are...hindered and caged by a rhyme scheme that just doesn't work. The nice repetition of the "broken" fourth line are a nice touch to it. IT also brings about how...things are jagged and broken in the world currently. WhatI don't like, really, is how you progress from Angel, to Princess...then back to Angel. Especially with "Little Angel, then "Little PRincess, and "My Little Princess" and finally to "Our little angel." Other than...stability, it's a fine poem.
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