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| createanarchy 2006-11-26 ch 1,  | abusethis is a brillant poem, and so true. I like it alot also love your pen name and the song it's from x |
| Aimee Raven 2006-11-09 ch 1, | abuseHm, I read your profile and then I just figured I'd check the reviews you got for this poem and seriously...I don't know what problem that flaming person has, but honestly, you shouldn't get upset because she/he clearly did not understand your poem. I found it very paradoxical and full of meaning and strangely sweet. I think it shows affection for mothers but the truth as well. The last stanza is particularly good, and though I feel this lacks poeticity or whatever sometimes, it has a great point and a sensational way of getting the meaning across. Good job :). Though I understand mothers, I do agree with you for most of it. Keep writing! Love, Mia |
| cocaine and cherries 2006-11-08 ch 1, | abusei like what i get from this. to me, it's saying how mothers have thier own little picture of the world, and sometimes, they need to open thier eyes to whats right.in.front.of.them. |
| poetic abortion 2006-11-07 ch 1, | abuseYour last stanza is amazing. There is so much impact and hard-hitting grit in the use of 'mum'; it gives it such a, I don't know, BEGGING feel. The poem was powerful and raw-tipped and real. Lovely. Really lovely. - Noelle |
| teh tarik 2006-11-07 ch 1, | abuseyour last line just left an impact on me. wonderful. all mothers - any sort of mother - should read this. |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2006-11-07 ch 1, | abuseWell, one can immediately tell that you are not a mother (not that I am, but I think I can say that I know a bit more than you, judging by this poem), and one can tell that you really have no idea what you're talking about. Abusive households are not as common as loving or welcoming ones. No, they are not non-existant, but not every household is an abusive one. Mothers for the most part love and care for their children. It is their job to protect their children at an early age. Children are ungrateful to their mothers, hurt them, disrespect them, and disregard everything they say. Your poem, beyond simply being disgusting, is awkward and almost as though you're trying to make the world worse than it is. The world isn't perfect. It's never perfect. But you're just being stupid through a poorly written poem. What you're living in is not reality, it's rebellion, and the belief that you, of course, know better. I'm sorry, but do you think parents are stupid? Did it ever occur to you that they have lived much longer than you have? Apparantely not. |