I somehow missed this poem when going through your poetry.

huh...

Anyhow just going on a reading basis...this isn't one of your best pieces but better than what I've with other people.

Keree

P.S. Hey! You need to come back and post some more poetry for me to review. Please.

Aww! Cute! Lol. I loved this one too. Great job!

SF

Cute poem. The last line is adorable. Good luck with poetry and life.

Twilight Starr

very sweet

hey heyz! aw...so moving manz. we all kno hu da inspiration was aye? *lifts eyebrows* lolz neways i like its! WRITE MORE! bye byes

Short and sweet; I like it.

awsome poem its cool...your so talented lolz...so who is your special someone? you gotta tell me PLZ

hey, nice poem bel, good work :)

omg ur first poem posted up! YAY! go girl! lol... well gud work! and keep at adding different techniques! lol

Congratulations on your first post, and here's some feedback. It's a pretty simple, common type of poem, and though I'm not too fond of this type of poetry, I actually think it's kind of cute. I'd expand on it, perhaps add a little more to it, but even so, it's a rather ordinary poem. It's short, it's simple, and it's a very well-used concept, though most ideas are these days.