It's nice. I like how short it is yet how it just makes you feel so sad. It's haunting almost.

This piece isn’t bad by any means, but I feel that more detail and fewer trite expressions would help this piece improve. Describing fate as cruel is cliché. If you want to use a cliché, it shouldn’t be the heart of the poem (as it is in this case) and I think you should probably tell why you feel fate is cruel in more detail. I would like to see this poem fleshed out. Keep writing!