Oh my goodness! This poem totally relates to me. I wanted this guy but...I can't tell the truth...

Nice job!

Sweet, its well written, words chosen with deep thought, its pulsing with emotion, no improvement needed, great poem, keep writing... and i'll keep reading!

Lurid

Beautiful poem! I think it speaks for many people out there.

I love how you created some interesting kind of tension the way you split the verses up. One second I thought I knew what the following verse would be about, the next I was surprised by a sudden change in tone. :)

Hey -nice poem you have here. You do make me sense the longing and emptiness you speak of. I almost sense the struggle to tell this truth that you can't tell...it seems that the poem in of itself is a representation of that, a speech that the speaker strains to get out. Nice effect. : ]

I didn't understand the word "longiness" in line 14. Also, is your use of capitalization in some places and not in others deliberate (e.g., you begin some sentences without caps, the capitalization of the word "All" in line 16 [which I found very interesting])? All in all, very nice work : ]

impressive work

Aw

I really enjoyed reading this, I love the way it all comes together, Nicely done!

very nice i like the msg your sending lots of ppl can relate.

hahaha i know this sounds straight forward or deserves a "easier said then done" saying but JUST DO IT, haha

ps: check some of my work need a lil help since im a lil new

cute lily or u should put it in the c2 list :P