WOW! This must have been an amzing experiance. I love this because it is short and simple and well, it makes me want to smile. I love the use of quotations because I can hear the sound of the scenery. I don't think that anything else is needed however. It is great as just a simple, short, sweet poem.

Always,

Lady Alera Van Hexis

Queen Regent of Darkness and Lust

I really like this! It is really sweet! It is always nice to find someone like that;)

This one

makes me

smile.

simple as that.

wow...

Nice poem, but I thought it was a little too brief. I think that a more detailed description of the setting would've made it better. The use of quotations around parts of the poem worked well.

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sweet...