The descriptions are wonderful, the feeling perfect. You woke my eyes up.

"The flavor of the retrospect?", is quite unique. The situation created is truly enhanced by the specific and distinct description. "I wallow here-like the diseased buffalo,", for example really gives a broader picture than saying stagnant or vacant or any other abstract feeling that you could have written in its place. Very thought provoking. Great write.

so, so green.

Aww... I love how you write so much. You're just cranking 'em out, huh? You make genius seem easy... -_- Gawsh. Wonderful. Again, the prose poem thing going on! Even though this is in poem form. Yeah. I think it'd be good as a prose poem.