FlyFF!! I love that game!! This is also the second FlyFF fic I've read. The first being the prequel to this. I can't wait for the next update!!

Well, I still don't get why you are not getting any reviews. Even a perfect story needs reviews to chop it down and make it better.

I doubt there is any grammar mistakes here, but I'll double check, just to make certain...

...Nope, nothing as far as grammar is concerned.

One thing you need to be careful of, and I do this a lot too, is long strings of dialogue in the middle of the chapter. This can confuse the reader as to who is talking and who is saying what.

Other than that, just keep on keepin' on.

I can't believe that you haven't gotten more hits and reviews for this story! Its awesome.

There were maybe a few grammar mistakes but that is all.