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I love it. I write things like this in class, too. but mine harldy ever flow like this. the word choice adds a really cool rhythm.
i can feel it speed up and slow down
as you get more excited and more mellow.
it's a great poem, and i love the title for it. :]
-sara.
I loved this. Simply because of the words you use, and the easy flow it has, through it's complexity. It has an interesting message, though kind of deeply wound in. This is absolutely great!