Reviews for Keep Things to Yourself

sicklysnowwhite 2007-01-14 ch 1,	abusevery akward. halting and you're right, the rhyme scheme is bizarre and doesnt help the peice a bit. try just rewriting the whole thing. minus the rhyming, you dont need it. reword somethings add some better words, ect.
capriciousguy 2006-12-09 ch 1,	abusehm... the rhyme scheme IS way off, but if you just read it like theres no rhyming at all, it sounds just fine. personally, i would ditch the guy, what an **. hahaha. i liked it overall although i think it WOULD be better if it just wasn't rhymed at all, and maybe worked on the rhythem instead. i love how your able to project feeling from the reader. whenever i write poetry, it ends up just telling a story. and i can't rhyme for crap. so good job, keep writing. (i hope that doesn't turn into a catch phrase) no really, write more.
An-Author-At-Heart 2006-11-08 ch 1,	abuseGood poem, I like how you mixed the scheme a bit. It kind of reminds me of me sometimes, I don't know when to keep my mouth shut! Anyway, the idea was good, I enjoyed it. Btw, thanks again for reading Hopelessly Devoted! I'm glad you liked the new chapter!! Oh, and about your prediction... Let's just say... you're definitely not off base ;)
The Un-great-ful 2006-11-08 ch 1,	abuseSoul, not sole. Nice construction, you've some talent, but I advise checking your work more thoroughly in future to eliminate errors before you post. We all continue to learn (hopefully), I wish you the best for the future. Alan.