Ooh harsh. Cool. :) I like it. It made me want to laugh evilly.

I really liked the lines, "you think i can't see/ when you cry in the rain." Very potent. I liked this a lot. I had to reread it once or twice, prolly cuz I'm listening to music and can't focus on the words and extract meaning w/o a ton of effort...But yeah...Very good.

Well constructed, you filled it exquisitely with subtle imagery. Well done.

Alan.