wow that last part gave me chills! that was so good!! i hope u continue with this! and YES submit it!

I like the way you capture the attitude of the whites towards the Indians. I don't know much US history, but I've heard about the Trail of Tears and it is just as despicable as any of the Death Marches of the Holocaust. A pretty good portrayal of the events :)

That was awesome, truly. I know it's only a one-shot but I think there's parts you should elaborate more on. Like the rendezvous point. Otherwise, I really liked it.