Reviews for Our fingers intertwine

Reviews For: Our fingers intertwine

Hed in the Cloudz 2008-05-24 ch 1,	abuseI love the rhyme scheme! I'm not sure exactly what your model is (like I've said, I'm not much of a poetry expert) but it's very stirring and light at the same time-- which pretty much corresponds with the tone of the poem, I think. But then, the last two lines don't fit in at all! If all this person can feel is love, how do they change their mind so quickly? It sucks to be them, but reasons are good! I mean, there are always excuses if you're desperate, and this person seems pretty much the definition of the word. --Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile!)
Lurid Black 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseIt was a sweet rhyme scheme, really well done and thought over deeply, keep writing! ~Lurid~
XxXKristie marieXxX 2007-11-02 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good, I love the last couple lines. Adding to favs! Kristie Marie
sweets555 2007-11-01 ch 1,	abuseinteresting situation. i like it.
.mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2007-01-26 ch 1,	abuseHmm... when the summary says "think metaphor", do you mean that the metaphor is that when the glove is taken off, that is you showing your true self to the said lover, who prefers the false, and recoils? Interesting. I liked it. --stixerz-- [[add to faves.]]
dresdendevotchka 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseQuite a sonnet. I loved the ending... I really like how airy it was until those two end lines - that's what got me. You have such a knack for writing emotions perfectly. Keep up the great work!
Gabrielle Wing 2006-12-15 ch 1,	abuseMy, 'bout time I return to the reading scene. This is quite a poem. I must admit I don't really read poems, but this holds such hope in the beginning, and then kinda like despair in the end.
none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 1,	abusewell, i agree that rhyming schemes really trap you (my rhyming pieces that i began with are absolutely cringeworthy), but i think you did a good job with this piece. rhyme is very difficult, and you managed to evoke a sweet atmosphere with this poem. the only thing i didn't really like was the last two lines...wouldn't s/he recoil from his/her touch?
An-Author-At-Heart 2006-11-27 ch 1,	abuseOh this was very nicely written! The mood was so sweet and romantic, very light, though the end packed a punch. I didn't read the "angst" part in the categorizing so I was surprised. The imagery was lovely, and the rhyme scheme was actually very good! Nice rhymes, great flow, it was well-written. Good job! And thank you so much for reading "Hopelessly Devoted"! I appreciate it a lot, not only you reading it but actually enjoying it and taking the time to review. LOL I'm glad the end made you laugh. Again, thank you!
simpleplan13 2006-11-26 ch 1,	abuseaw.. this is sweet and well done... im not a big fan of rhyming.. but still nicely done
RandoMaia 2006-11-22 ch 1,	abuseLike the concept, but honestly, you coulda done a lot better by this if you hadn't boxed yourself in with this rhyme scheme. I think you should try this in freeverse, maybe... I mean, my rhymes die horrible, horrible deaths, so I know I shouldn't really be talking... sorry :(
Guardrail 2006-11-14 ch 1,	abuseBeautiful, I love this poem. Your writing has a lot of life to it. Great work and keep it up.
eileen 2006-11-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseUm, it started off well, like happily, then what did she do, black glove..soudned unusual in the end...

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