this is awesome!

I'm quite impressed with your gift for writing. I've sampled some of your other works besides this one, but In Vino Veritas takes the cake! I've just begun to become fascinated with the Renaissance, and your story has influenced me to experiment with my own writing. The development of your characters and relationships are so realistic, yet completely original at the same time. I cannot wait for your next chapter, as I have read the other parts as well.

I was wondering when you're going to update?

Great and interesting ending to the chapter. I love the different faces you explore in each chapter, firstly the family relationship, then the maura/adriana relationship then the Nico/adriana sexual relationship. Though his character seems to be brutal...there are aspects that somewhat make him redeemable,and I find this interesting since in a lot of stories, the writer instantly tries to conjure up reader's hate for any man that is forceful with a woman, but you don't. This abandons the trap of cliche and I am very much intrigued on the direction this is heading in.!

I find the husband character quite fascinating and am still debating whether I like him yet or not. I like how you parallel the differences in tenderness between Maura and the girl, and the husband and the girl...it gives a sense of relationship development. This chapter is written well...the only teeny critical thing I would say is that the word 'passion' is used many times (I don't know if this is the effect you intended? if so, im sorry for mentioning it!) and passion, being such a strong word would possibly be more effective and impactful (please tell me that's a word) if only used once, or maybe twice. Other than that, I am enjoying the story, and have it alerted! xx

I was instantly drawn to this story because I studied Renaissance Italian History two years ago, in my final year of school. I'm glad that you have taken the time to research, because that is what makes a story believable and all the more intriguing. I am interested in the developmeant of the characters, and I did begin to get a sense of the era during this chapter. Ok...next chapter!

well, i can honestly say that i don't usually go around reading romance fics. but i can't say i was disappointed at all. from the title to the beautiful writing in the text - this story shows a great deal of promise, not to mention as is it is already extremely well written. i'm not sure what the overall plot design is, but without doubt, as far as setting, characters, and the prose is concerned, this is one of the best titles i've come across at fictionpress in a long time.

expecting nothing less from the next post,
kakyou

interesting...i love the build up so far! U It's great hon!

Interesting ^^

I like it so far :) , it seems much like a book I read this summer (the birth of venus) , but it's good, i like the writing style, though it's not what i usually read it's interesting :)

Oh...

okay, this would be like, a new thing for you, wouldn't it be? but as usual i like the sentence construction... that would be a great point for the story, and you did well on making it feel its supposed age/era, although a little more effort to add up an ancient feel would be welcomed, if not necessary... it'll do much better darling.

but for the whole, i really think the story would make it far...


hurray for you!


I'll drink to that! (wink)


-I really, really love this writer people, what can i say?-
-len-

A very interesting start. It's achange in what you usually write, shonen-ai. I'd love to know what would happen to her. ^_^ Though I'm not a big fan of shojou-ai