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| Lady E 2006-12-15 ch 1,  | abuseWow. I am not sure what to make of this at all. The first line certainly had me cringing, heart reaching out to you, and it followed from there...somewhere. "& i smiled neatly at you as the secrets fell from / my eyelashes onto you," The imagery is gorgeous. The "neatly" thrown in there is so misplaced and jolting all I can think of is how you two -don't- match and mourn for you. |
| A Perfect Sonnet 2006-11-13 ch 1, | abuseThis flows really well -I like it. "& let your disease out of you & onto my skin & the kitchen floor" is my favorite part. Less because of the words, I think, because there are sections of those I like even more, but more because of the rhythm and how it feels. I mean, it just felt really nice in the mind of my mouth and...I think that justifies it, really. |
| poetic abortion 2006-11-10 ch 1, | abuseI just love your style, all around. It's wonderous and pretty and really something and, uh, yeah; I love it. You can write emotion better than I and, uh, oh. It is pretty. - Noelle |