 no.peace.los.angeles 2006-11-11 . chapter 1This is a very strange poem. I mean, I can see why it's strange if it was the result of a writing exercise. It's interesting. I love the images you've created, especially the velvety antlers and the end "gasoline-soaked and ablaze." Is there supposed to be a line break between "fallthrough" or are they supposed to be that way? (I'm really freakily nitpicky about stuff like that...) Either way, beautiful and interesting poem. Keep writing! :) |