Tev, you know I love it. And I do. I thought you didn't like poetry, but it's good, it's really good, and I hope you do keep posting. (Why haven't you responded to my emails?)

I liked the piece alot! The way the lines were set up gave me the image of rain for some reason. Good job.
Adorian

I liked this much better with the format- not only does it make it more original, but it fits the poem and complements it.
Did you mean the ends of the first and third stanzas to rhyme? I liked the way that sounded... maybe there could be a way to do that with the rest of the poem- but that might make it sound forced.
Anyway, nice. Kinda anti-cliche, yet teenlit stuff at the same time. If that's possible.