I always love stories about serial killers and the minds of psychopaths; they say the sacriest kind of monster is the human kind. I just wish the murder had a little more detail; what did the camera crew do? What did the narrator do or say as he was choking the life out of the guy? Call me violent, but nothing makes me happier in a story than a good, gory death scene. Very creepy story, keep up the good work.

Well that was interesting. Gave me a creepy feeling. I do agree with the first reviewer: a bit more detail into the mind of the murderer would improve this story. "I felt like doing it." doesn't give much of an explanation. Even if the murderer doesn't understand this feeling himself, the description of the feeling can be expanded and made clearer. The reason for the murder doesn't have to be good for us sane people, but for the psycho, it does. Look at "The Tell-Tale Heart" by Poe. Although the reasons for the murder are insane, they're there and to the psycho, they're justifiable.

Overall, I liked it quite a lot. Good prose, interesting idea. I'm also a fan of flash fiction. It's interesting that at the beginning the narrator sounds... normal. Then at the last paragraph, the sentences become shorter and more sudden. And then, of course, he... snaps. Nice job.

This was an interesting short piece, and it does work well as flash fiction. I think you should go into a bit more detail on how Sok, the narrator feels as he stares at Render's teeth. Why does he want to kill him? Also, instead of saying that Render is annoying, show it in his actions. In general, just a bit more detail would make this creepier.