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| eyreaffair 2006-11-16 ch 1, anon. | abuse'sealed with a golden pink ribbon and a love heart' - i love that line! it's so pretty - and reminds me of my old jewellery case (i have never had a diary with a golden pink ribbon, more's the pity, although i did stick a sticker that said: private on it) i like the third verse the best, it gets to the heart of the matter. nicely written, i especially like the formatting. |
| hidden sapphire 2006-11-13 ch 1,  | abuseHey! This is good. I had to read it twice though, because it's a little bit confusing. It's a very unique style. Good job! |
| classic violet 2006-11-12 ch 1, | abusewow, simply gorgeous. i love how the colours are strewn together like that, makes it seem more beautiful. i love the third stanza especially. the last line seems to be a note at the end of the diary, or something. lovely job! keep writing! |
| Kalopsia 2006-11-12 ch 1, | abusethis is very creative - i like that you experiment with format. also, whether one would realize it or not there is a lot of imagery here. i see like words coming out of a diary and the words you've written are coming apart...i dunno. maybe im seeing more than what is really there but i really like this piece. great job. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-11-11 ch 1, | abuseMarvelously well worded and presented. I like the specific descriptions and how they relate to the overall tone of the work. Very well written. |
| HiddenFlame42 2006-11-11 ch 1, | abuseAmazing piece! This is what I love about your writing - it's so original! Keep up the awesome work! |