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C. Hinton 2008-07-05 ch 11,	abuseHaven't finished reading it yet, but this seems a fine yarn as far as the genre is concerned. Certainly I'm enjoying it now that I'm past the first couple chapters. I will say though, a little editing will take this story a long way further. At times your prose gets a little dry and you have a few spelling mistakes, common stuff really. Things like ring when you meant wring, that sort of thing. Also, you don't capitalize the 'T' in the when naming a ship. It is never The Pyre, but the Pyre. 'The' is not part of the ship's name proper and thus would not be capitalized unless it directly followed a period (obviously). Still, all said and done this is definitely a good read and I'll be coming back to finish reading it as soon as I can. Best of luck!
Katherine-the-greate 2007-10-25 ch 26,	abuseyay! you updated! good luck with your classes. please update again soon!
yayawhynot89 2007-10-24 ch 26,	abuseThis is Awesome! more please?
Emma.Q.Wilkinson 2007-10-21 ch 26,	abuseI loved that last line. Yep, Pembroke's a pirate at heart, all right. Oh boy. A half-drowned Charlotte, a Pierce set to be killed, a more than half-mad Randall, and two (possibly three?) lovesick pirates. This conclusion will be terribly, terribly interesting! Can't wait! ~Emma
Savvy0X 2007-08-24 ch 25,	abuseAh it's so nice to be back...Some action, treachery, sappy yet adorable love scenes, girls with obviously no taste in men which would cause them to actually have sex with Randall...I love it. Sorry I've been gone so long, life got in the way, plus a break was in order. Please don't throw me in the lazarette! Needless to say I have like over 100 e-mail notifications from and this site telling me there is a new chapter for like every story I have ever read. Yeah I have a lot of reading to do. I was quite pleased to see this one come up. There was some great dialogue in there. I loved it and I await the next one! (Take your time God knows I have a lot to catch up on.)
Whyte wolf 2007-08-11 ch 25,	abuseGood as usual with a nice bit of well written drama
Emma.Q.Wilkinson 2007-08-10 ch 25,	abuseYAY! Another chappie! And NO! Our heroes are separated AGAIN... and how are they going to escape a burning house all tied up like that? panics More soon, please? ~Emma
kirstie 2007-07-18 ch 24, anon.	abuseAwesome story! You are an amazing writer and you just bring the story to life! I love pirate stories and am sad to see there are so few stories and especially so few that are good. Thanks for keeping it under M rating as well, I enjoy reading stories without explicit things in them. I look forward to reading more later!
Emma.Q.Wilkinson 2007-07-11 ch 24,	abuseGrey, you're being lewd in front of the ladies. That won't do. An update! Yay! A very good one! Poor Ana, that's gotta stink. Blast that Pierce... One thing: "the only decent man to me during my whole ordeal" seems a little awkward. Maybe "the only man who was decent to me"? Sorry this is a bit short... 'tis a tad difficult to concentrate on anything when I've FINALLY got my hands on my new Pirate Queen CD. Yay! More soon, please? ~Emma
Whyte Wolf 2007-07-11 ch 24, anon.	abuseHee hee, Cameron makes me laugh. The angst is good.
Katherine-the-greate 2007-07-04 ch 1,	abuseJust responding to what you think of as great words, I think you must have accidentally left out the word "betwixt". It is one of the coolist words in the english language other than "Pirate" of course.
leemya 2007-06-26 ch 23,	abuseGreat story! Please continue.
Whyte Wolf 2007-06-21 ch 23, anon.	abuseIt made me smile the way Pembroke just burst out with his confession. Oh angst and drama.
Emma.Q.Wilkinson 2007-06-21 ch 23,	abuseWell, this is an interesting turn of events! I had a feeling Charlotte wouldn't want to stay with Randall; she's smart, she'd come to her senses. But now it doesn't look like she has much choice, hm? And poor Ana, shown up like that... I did catch a typo: you said "grin and bare it" instead of "bear it." Another great chapter! Can't wait for more! ~Emma
Romania 2007-06-06 ch 22,	abuseoh, romance. I wish there had been more about Charlotte too. And, is it just me or is there a lot of kissing going on, not just in this chapter but in all the story?

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