Although this idea did have some merit, I feel the way you have executed it is somewhat dissapointing. The repetition of the word 'die' just doesn't sit right - and it doesn't read right. It just sounds wrong. As well, I think the use of different font faces (ie bolding, itacilising) also just hurts the poem. I suggest you reformat it, and I'll give you a suggestion as to how. For the first stanza, instead of what is written, how about:

I wanted to die
[to say] just stop ** looking at me
with those pretty eyes
they're blinding, searing
they're binding, peering

What do you think? Sorry if I'm not getting your origonal message - I'm hopeless at post-modern poems, as this one is.

Thanks,
- Clap Trap, from Review Marathon (link in my profile)

JESUS TAPDANCING CHRIST.
gorgeous. just gorgeous. x

"and you ask me why i never look you in the eye"

That struck a loud and painful chord with me... the number of times I've been asked that same question.

And this explains it more than I ever could. Thanks. Lovely work.