'Sweetness, it’s the night(cap) speaking'

loved it. wish i could write free verse like you.

xLuke

Whoosh. This poem is amazingly spellbinding. I was captured by the summary and lead all the way through.. and you never lost your feel, but instead made me want more. You really need to write again, I noticed you haven't in awhile..

I loved the line 'slurring your own edges'; something so gorgeous about it. I think that the format is really effective in places but is perhaps a little overdone in others. Overall I loved the tone of this, some ways like a whisper, others like a hiss.

I love the style of this and the formatting, it's very effective at making up different tones of lines & words in the reader's head. Great piece!

you are so talented you make me want to burn every word i've ever written.

'it's the night(cap) speaking' and 'scantily clad contempt'.

fucking YEAH.

nice one, wifey-lady. x

Wow. I have to say, I'm spellbound by this poem. Even reading it several times over... It's beautiful, but I have to admit there are parts that I just don't understand. Then again, poetry has never been my forte.

[Dancing (by herself)/ Poeple will only take so much/ Scantily clad contempt] Those lines were really awesome. You have a powerful way with words.

Peace -

Yay, a new poem!

Its been ages.

"The road shines with spilt uncertainty"

I love your poetry becuase its so god and i'm jealous. Sniff.

Review mine, you biatch.