This story was horrific! In a great and gripping way. I was horrified yet I kept reading, I was disgusted yet intrigued. I'm a Christain too and I still liked this story, however you should know it is possible for this story to create some controversy as it touches upon a very uneasy subject. I know you mean nothing bad by this story but get ready for a bit of hell *cackles evily*. But seriously, I really enjoyed your story, and I'll do anything to read more. (Yes... anything!

umm... ok, where to start? Killing things seems to be a recurring theme as such as the story has become boring, but that's just my opinion. If you want to make a story interesting you have to add in new narrative devices such as humour to entertain the audience. So... slashing things tends to get boring after a while. Nonetheless, you have captured Mia's brutality perfectly.

Even though you haven't uploaded any new chapters in a couple of months, I really hope you'll plan on continuining and not leave the story hanging. This was a pretty interesting read so far.

I like the concept and the plot, but I really feel like the story was very rushed. It would be much more entertaining had you taken the time to develop the details and descriptions in a more non-direct way. For example: “Falling to the floor, the last thing she saw was the glowing red eyes of the demon, swallowed by the blackness that came over her.” In my opinion, a slightly better way to say the same thing: “As the woman’s body descended in Mai’s arms and the darkness swallowed her, the image of the demon’s crimson eyes bore into the depths of her soul.” Maybe that’s too fanciful for your taste, and that’s just my style of writing. Either way it’s good work, only a shame the chapters are so short and hurried. My favorite chapter was “Something Under The Bed”. Poor kid.

Keep up the excellent work!

Wow... Good story. Kind of sad, too. Keep it up!

oh...who's this serial killer?
please,want to know so much...
can't wait till the damned apocaypse...huhu

yours forever in the bloody hell,
Dark Murderess...

okay,that's weird...i'm already inspired by this...*

Love the openeing, veryvery good and gripping. caught my attention =)

WOW! this is REALLY interesting! i can't wait for more! ( i hope there's more^.^) i'll post my stuff soon and i hope you'll read it. (i'll probably email u when i do if that's ok) well. this little demonic squirrel has homework to do so bye! ^.

this story is getting to be excellent. Keep up the good work.

this stroy sounds like it will be a good one. keep up the good writing