Very interesting and sad. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~

Loved it. I especially liked the way that we never learned the girl's name.

Wow, I liked tihs alot. It always cool when someone uses vivid detail to describe something, or someone, or somewhere even. And the reader doesn't even understand what world this is or what anything means, such as the "Covenant Breakers", that leaves almost all the story to the readers imagination.

I liked it alot. Good work, keep it up.

I forgot about the introduction by the time I had finished reading the story and then re-read it, and it makes a lot of sense, because this story has such a dreamlike quality. I really wish I had dreams like this. So insightful, beautiful, even if it can't be completely comprehended, even if there is no one right way to comprehend it. It captures the grace and power of a dream.

Ooh, I like this.

"They slaughtered the last hope.

And so they slaughtered themselves."

An amazing last line. Really. :) An odd dream, of course, but cool nonetheless. Good job!

Oh, by the way, I got FMA 10, and IT ROCKS! Roy kicks Lust's butt...

This is extremely deep, don't dreams do the weirdest things?

I love "like crunching of crab shells" and all the discriptive language you used. so powerful!

Fascinating. It inspired me... to draw. Perhaps I will.

That was deep. I liked it, I always did have an interest in dreams.

~SirScott