I was there! Israel was so fun. Come visit me already.

Well, first I would like to say that you should probably be more careful, and not put your name, age, and phone number on the internet, even fictionpress. Now that we are past that, this is beautiful. Even though I understand that you are strugging with what you believe, this is still wonderful. I want to go there so bad, its funny actaully. Most people think that I am crazy. Anyway, wonderful job, God bless.

This is really good and it flows good. Its alos strong and has good meaning. Good luck with the contest.

wo. major goosebumps.

i think this is really good, it flows well and none of teh vocabulary is forced.

i wish you luck in the contest.