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| felicia13 2007-12-25 ch 6,  | abuseI just want you to know that the chapter numbers you wrote and what they really should be don't match up. Just in case you cared. Um, this was gross, but I think I really like Jason. Well, and Tom, but I certainly like them both better than that kid who is the Anti-Christ. They're just so much cooler. I think I like Tom better. Point of preference. What comes next, Bob-o? I hope you write more over the x-mas break. Felica. |
| felicia13 2007-12-25 ch 5, | abuseAnti-Christ, huh? Seems a little redundant considering what's already happened in this story. Personal preference, I suppose. Um, seems a bit like filler to me, but I'm sure there's plot developing here. Can't tell because we aren't far enough in yet. Nice start, truly. Now that we're past introductory stuff, it should get interesting... Felicia. |
| felicia13 2007-12-25 ch 4, | abuseTom was the one from the 'haunted house,' right? In any case, this is turning out to be as messed up as the name and summary promised. Wish I could write it out like this... or at all, really. Don't have much experience in the horror department, though. *shrugs* Good luck with this. And Merry Christmas, Bob-o. Felicia. |
| WyrdWolf 2007-12-18 ch 6, | abusePretty goddamn violent scene there, Bob, though the 'A ghetto crucifixion, if you will.' bit made it worth a nice laugh. So they're finally gonna meet and really start planning, huh? Intense. Now the really sick **'s gonna start flaring. Wolfie |
| CharliiWrote. 2007-12-17 ch 2, | abuseHmm Good But too saw like... Think if it had more detail to the way the bodies were and looked i'd have said more... but im hard to please. Excelent otherwise thought. |
| gramma 2007-12-13 ch 6, | abuseheck of a story, but I wish you would write another story without blood and guts and killing. I know you have it in you! Please try. |
| Keisha Orange 2007-12-11 ch 6, | abuseTerrifying! Just the way I like it! ;-) |
| WyrdWolf 2007-11-16 ch 5, | abuseThe antichrist, eh? Damn, talk about a psycho who meets up with other psychos; he's the epitome. And with the antichrist himself helping the pair of them, Tom and Jason are bound to get out. *grin* Let the bloodshed begin. Wolfie |
| The Jynx of Kari 2007-06-08 ch 4, | abuse*even bigger terrified eyes* Wow. They meet. And is the eight year old to be a part of this?! Wow. Dark humor in it, can't say that enough. [“He kills only females, eighteen year old females. They call him Hugh because of the playboy dude. His name is Hugh.”] ... I'm like kinda freaked and interested at the same time. Good work. __kari |
| The Jynx of Kari 2007-06-08 ch 3, | abuse*big terrified eyes* This is like, the most interesting thing I've read. OMG. Freakishly graphic with the bodies yet some strange dark humor with the now half black teacher... *shudder* This is awesome [again, I lack the right words]. __Kari |
| The Jynx of Kari 2007-06-08 ch 2, | abuseWait. Whoa? This was merely a prologue [twenty minutes and five dead cops later... heh]?! Well, that was interesting enough tho I do think that the girl's reactions could've been better by like A LOT! Otherwise it was pretty good. __Kari |
| The Jynx of Kari 2007-06-08 ch 1, | abuseO.o shiznit. That's a nice beginning. Can't believe I didn't read this. Since you like advertised it and all I thought I might as well read it... I'm spooked. It's almost sick, they way Tom thinks... the pure genius of the death traps. lol. I would not go to a random house from a random letter. lol. Never... Well maybe. lol. I'll keep reading. __kari |
| WyrdWolf 2007-06-07 ch 4, | abuseYech. What a gross psycho. But what other kind is there, you know? Strong gore and craziness in this; very cool. Wolfie |
| felicia13 2007-03-31 ch 3, | abuseEw, that's gross! Really, really creepy and gross and it's making my fingers hurt. Why, Bob? Regardless, it was pretty well written and I have to say ... you're one twisted individual. But it's good for writing things like this. *shudders* Creepy. Felicia. |
| WyrdWolf 2007-03-23 ch 3, | abuse*whistle* Very creepy, Bob. The last bit, the description of how the bodies had been mutilated, was very powerful as well as clever and fear-inducing. Also, the grammar in this was much better than usual. Good chapter...creepy little child...*shiver* Wolfie |