Aw - there ya go. That's more like it.

It's weird tho - your ideas are the simplest human situations, never complicated by anything other than perhaps the Goth bitchiness of the narrator, in that one story - which leads me to think that maybe you're quite young.

And yet - your style, spelling, structure, the way your "stories" - if they can even be called that - flow, ... well, you're too good to be TOO young... in fact, I wouldn't be surprised if you weren't young at ALL, and only pick the simple situations you do to polish this incredible style you've developed.

Whatever the case - don't ever give up this poetry-prose thing that you do. It's unique. Maybe someday you could collect them into an anthology and publish 'em. It might make you famous. :) God knows *I've* never seen anything like it...

Well - I've seen things that were close - but they always sucked rocks. Yours works.

Pretty good, it's kind of like a snapshot of what it's like to grow up and be disillusioned.

Wow, this is pretty intense. I love this line:
Like a half-built roller coaster that I couldn’t help but jump on.
Amazing use of language && you portray the narrator's young self's feelings very well.
Great one-shot.
:) supergal

It was so emotional. Nicely written!

I liked this one. Nice use of words and feelings. Keep up the good work.

Cute little short work. Good JOB!

Nice work. It was short, but it doesn't need to be longer. It was a little dry, but so are most brief works. Keep it up.

Are you in love? The descriptions made me think so (not that I've ever been in love, lol). Cassie must have been a LOT older than the narrator. Great one-shot!