|Reviews for born dead|
| missmori 2/14/11 . chapter 1
this was...amazing. that's all i have to say.
| Her Wishing Well 4/21/07 . chapter 1
This is so unbelievably sad. But sad dosen't some it up. I can't imagine what it must be like for anyone to have to go through this. The simplictity of the lines makes every emotion raw and powerful. Amazing.
| disabled account 3/20/07 . chapter 1
Though some of the lines are somewhat obviously expressed (as in "life formed and she swelled; months passed with that promise"), the simplicity of the poem and the potency of the images, which are used here very sparingly (i.e., ten lovely blue fingers, you watched her buried with the world in her mouth) make the poem quite striking. Try for a little variation in the first two lines, and don't reinforce the concept of pregnancy with superfluous lines, since it is effectively conveyed by the poem anyway. The last two lines were priceless. Adieu, Kat
| mostly water 2/18/07 . chapter 1
Damn you for so many pretty lines.
"ten lovely blue fingers"
"you watched her buried with the world / in her mouth"
"you know the secret and the truth:"
Dammit. Really lovely.
| Elizabeth Bilberry 1/31/07 . chapter 1
This is bittersweet and makes me want to cry. Take care.
| simpleplan13 1/10/07 . chapter 1
sad and beautifully written.. powerful imagery
| dress her up in fairytales 12/22/06 . chapter 1
i love the summary - it pulled me in.
it's so strange ... because i can almost taste this ... feel the breath, i love it.
| no.peace.los.angeles 12/7/06 . chapter 1
This poem was positively heartbreaking. OMG. My goodness. I love the first line - fantastic opener, and gorgeous description of a woman going through pregnancy. Wow. Powerful piece. Keep writing! :)
| Forever Forbidden 11/26/06 . chapter 1
Short and simple? No, it's short, but very complex. Good poem!
| And Your Little Dog Too 11/26/06 . chapter 1
born dead? sounds cool too me has a lot behind it. i liekd this poem too :)
| LongNightz 11/23/06 . chapter 1
Oh wow, that was so sad.
You did a really lovely job, hon.
| by His blood 11/22/06 . chapter 1
beautiful and heartbreaking and absolutely gorgeous. 'she had two arms and two legs, ten lovely blue fingers that would never grasp.' amazing.
| beti213 11/20/06 . chapter 1
you have such a depth of originality in you-it's staggering. I especially loved the line "buried with the world in her mouth" and the last line. I also appreciated the fact that I had to read it twice to completely grasp it, as usual with your poetry. Bravo once again... for taking something cliche and making it real again.
| Aquafied 11/15/06 . chapter 1
i think of abortion and blue skies
the most horrible days happen to be the most beautiful
| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X 11/13/06 . chapter 1
This is a sad, yet very powerful poem. I like. Wonderful work, as always. Keep it up.