Pretty!

Oh my, I love that last line. A lot. You have this way of melding words and phrases together, and I think a lot of it is your lack of real punctuation - it's refreshing, and everything flows so well. You use interesting phrases, too, and that makes your poetry so much fun to read. Gorgeous work. Keep writing! :)

"And like this days will come and we'll be vagabonds, traveling when our feet are on." I just love that. Also the part about not being one for lovers -I like that you used shoulders instead of the body parts that people, uh, usually use when talking about lovers. This was really well done...

I just want you to know that I enjoyed this poem and the newer one and that you write very well. Kudos to you!