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Na'rmer
2008-04-15
ch 1,
abuseSublime; it's not 'words falling from one's mouth', it's just the way I felt when I've finished this tragic, yet beautiful description. The title is great, the subject is a little bit old, but good, once you figure out a way to resurrect it :), your description is great (already mentioned)... what can I say more? I like it.

It flows beautifully, in all its dark, melancholic glory!
Nocturnal silhouette
2007-04-22
ch 1,
abuseOh my goodness. This was absolutely gorgeous. Wonderfully written. The emotions are very real, and I love the metaphor of the leaf. Brilliantly written.
Ravena Wolf
2006-11-15
ch 1,
abuseyou have a spell mistake: was digging threw the
should be: was digging through the

this:storms and cold and gray.
sounds better this way: storms of cold and grey.

you have many miss spellings and misusuals of the word threw and through, but other than that I really liked this, what is the is though, is it a poem or is it a story that will go on?
-Raven
*merry meet, merry part, bright the cheeks, warm the heart*
Da Vinci at Work
2006-11-14
ch 1,
abuseBeautifully enchanting. Is there a chance that you will turn this into a story? :D
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