I love your narrator he's serious but funny and sarcastic... There's something so riveting about what happens after death and you managed to capture that in this story Amazing Job. :)

Wow. I don't think I've ever thought about ghosts that way before. But did you have to end it there? :( I wish that there was more to it than that.

Great short story, I love the voice you've got going there. Sarcastic, experienced, but...young. He's not tired enough yet to let go and say "what the Hell I'm going there anyway". Keep spinning Batman-kun.

So, what happens now? No more being a...err, living ghost in a crazy world? You'd better not stop it there...:(

For some reason, FictionPress didn't send me alerts for the past three chapters. So I was completely surprised when I clicked on the link and saw chapter five. But anyways.

Wow. I'm confused. Is this the end? Or are we going to become less confused?

huh...okay. so now he killed himself in the ghost world.

really good!! I never would have thought of anything like this.

~Noelle

i like this story...its good. i dont know if i left a review earlier...i might have i review alotta stuff. i liked this because it was really good writing, and it was about like fantasy and ghosts and stuff...i really like that. good writing...i think i will check out your other stuff.
oh yeah! i just wanted to ask you a question - i was confused about the last paragraph thing...where he says "oh, god, no!" and then disappears...why did he do that? was it because he realized it was the wrong thing to do? or...eh...i dont know. just asking.

~noelle

Hm, pretty good but the chappys are a little on the short side...

...*sad face*

*winces on behalf of kid* Oh, _ouch_. His dad's dead and he doesn't know it 'cause he's crossed over from the Other Side, huh? Tough. So, so, how *did* he cross back over?
Please write more soon!

aww...poor kid. i feel bad for him. wouldnt that mean that his dad was in the other side now?
well, unless he was a ghost. then he probably would be very hard to find..

either way.

This is a really interesting story because it is written from the perspective of a ghost. I know I love a great ghost story and this is quite fascinating, especially when describing things a ghost can and can't do and what happens after death.

Keep it up.

Danielle Thamasa

O I wanna read this. Just one critique "Sometimes, there’s enough power in a spirit that it sticks around. Power, or whatever." Power? Phrasing's a little odd there. Otherwise, great catch. Great voice. So, I'm guessing not one of the ghosts Batman battles?

Whoa. Crazy-creepy-weird cool. Is there more? And why don't people/ghosts like to "cross over"?