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| this account is no longer o... 2007-03-26 ch 5,  | abuseWow. I don't think I've ever thought about ghosts that way before. But did you have to end it there? :( I wish that there was more to it than that. |
| Gathering Crows 2006-12-16 ch 5, | abuseGreat short story, I love the voice you've got going there. Sarcastic, experienced, but...young. He's not tired enough yet to let go and say "what the Hell I'm going there anyway". Keep spinning Batman-kun. |
| DCXX 2006-11-29 ch 5, | abuseSo, what happens now? No more being a...err, living ghost in a crazy world? You'd better not stop it there...:( |
| Jazmin3 Firewing 2006-11-25 ch 5, anon. | abuseFor some reason, FictionPress didn't send me alerts for the past three chapters. So I was completely surprised when I clicked on the link and saw chapter five. But anyways. Wow. I'm confused. Is this the end? Or are we going to become less confused? |
| Noelle 2006-11-16 ch 4, anon. | abusehuh...okay. so now he killed himself in the ghost world. really good!! I never would have thought of anything like this. ~Noelle |
| Noelle 2006-11-15 ch 3, anon. | abusei like this story...its good. i dont know if i left a review earlier...i might have i review alotta stuff. i liked this because it was really good writing, and it was about like fantasy and ghosts and stuff...i really like that. good writing...i think i will check out your other stuff. oh yeah! i just wanted to ask you a question - i was confused about the last paragraph thing...where he says "oh, god, no!" and then disappears...why did he do that? was it because he realized it was the wrong thing to do? or...eh...i dont know. just asking. ~noelle |
| DCXX 2006-11-15 ch 3, | abuseHm, pretty good but the chappys are a little on the short side... |
| Gathering Crows 2006-11-14 ch 2, | abuse...*sad face* |
| Jazmin3 Firewing 2006-11-14 ch 2, anon. | abuse*winces on behalf of kid* Oh, _ouch_. His dad's dead and he doesn't know it 'cause he's crossed over from the Other Side, huh? Tough. So, so, how *did* he cross back over? Please write more soon! |
| Noelle 2006-11-14 ch 2, anon. | abuseaww...poor kid. i feel bad for him. wouldnt that mean that his dad was in the other side now? well, unless he was a ghost. then he probably would be very hard to find.. either way. |
| Danielle Thamasa 2006-11-14 ch 2, | abuseThis is a really interesting story because it is written from the perspective of a ghost. I know I love a great ghost story and this is quite fascinating, especially when describing things a ghost can and can't do and what happens after death. Keep it up. Danielle Thamasa |
| Gathering Crows 2006-11-13 ch 1, | abuseO I wanna read this. Just one critique "Sometimes, there’s enough power in a spirit that it sticks around. Power, or whatever." Power? Phrasing's a little odd there. Otherwise, great catch. Great voice. So, I'm guessing not one of the ghosts Batman battles? |
| Jazmin3 Firewing 2006-11-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseWhoa. Crazy-creepy-weird cool. Is there more? And why don't people/ghosts like to "cross over"? |