This is just lovely- short and sweer. The simile at the end was absolutely wonderful.

Nice use of imagery. I love how you can say so much in so few words.

I added this to my favorites yesterday, but didn't have time to review it then. I can so feel this piece (congrats on the tanka format, btw) I do fear rejection, from more than one person in fact, thus the reason my requests go unsubmitted as well. But yes the leaves do lose all color (and I live where they stay on the tree all year...). Life becomes just rote, one day flowing into the next, or sometimes it's more like stumbling from one day to the next, just performing by habit the things that have to be done with barely a notice. I know I'll grow past this phase, as one must inevitably do. Just trying to enjoy the "quiet" and use it as time for reflection... gleaning what lessons should be learned from this, and then either applying that acumen to everyday life, or tucking it away for future use. Doesn't mean it's easy... in fact it's actually very, very difficult... but I know that it can be done and what doesn't kill you makes you stronger.

Well, now, that was certainly more than what you thought a tanka would extract in a review, eh? Needless to say, you can see why it's in my favorites folder. Truly, Tourterelle (a pensive day)

Tanka! I like this- it made me think about how human interaction aids personal growth.

short, and yet so full of imagery. great job. x

nice piece, really good imagery, espically the last line i think. short and sweet, the way i like em. good job, peace

Short and [sweet]... no... beautiful, deep, etc. I love the last two lines.

A sad and beautiful poem. Wonderful imagery and good wording throughout. It had this indefinable rhythm and atmosphere to it. Simply good work, so well done.

*sniff* You changed your name, Johnny! :(

Oh well... Sorry I haven't reviewed in awhile- but this is nifty! I like the part about leaves the best.

.:*§*:. Calliope Veronica .:*§*:.

beautiful.
thank you so much for your critique :) i agree, the ending wasn't as strong as i wanted it so there might be an edit or two coming later on.
thanks again and keep writing!

saddening... ouch...

Oh my. That is really sad. I can see the life draining out of this person. Just dramatic and nice. Beautiful work. Keep writing! :)

so sad and beautiful, i love "unsubmitted, requests fell/like unsure foosteps." and true, too, the way life passes us by.

Tragic and very concrete poem. I love the haunting imagery of the last two lines. Good work!