I like it... But I think you can get a lot deeper you know... Alhtough it keeps me wanting more... a lot more.. as in I can't wait to part 3 b/c it has good thought. Play more on your words (other words put more thought)

I;m not trying to be all **-like... its just my opinion

Can't wait to read more!

~ XEm0-MuffinX

The last line is my favorite.

You truly are a talented and beautiful writer.

Still lovely, but again, the large block of text is hard to read. Is there going to be more to this?

Much Love,

*K's Moonshadow*

P.S. New poem, please check out "Oh the Stories You Told..." ;-) Thanks!