What was the assignment? It was sad and sweet, but some of your phrases were rather blatant. I think you'll get a nice ringing effect if it's read in the classroom. Keep it up.

I would suggest a spell check, but that is minor. The main point in the story is where you could accept your brother's death and that he was happy and whole in your mind after that. The house by the beach where Andrew died could be made into a symbol of happiness, if you wanted, by implying that it was really there where he was freed of his imperfections and given joy. I'm not sure that is where you want to go with your plot, but it would make a powerful centerpiece statement.

Peace, Doc