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| bavand 2008-05-28 ch 1,  | abuseOh man! Darlin, you are a master of hard-hitting imagery to every day things. Laundry??!! Who knew--and yet with the way you wrote it--it makes perfect sense. |
| Scribe Of All Trades 2008-02-07 ch 1, | abusewow I love images in this one--my fav so far. |
| Tytherpol 2007-03-08 ch 1, | abuseYou are an amazing poet. I don't like 'her sheets are her lover.' I don't know... just sheets isn't the symbolism I would have thought of, especially with the first line of the poem being what it is, but this is still a gorgeous poem. nice. ~Always. Sara. |
| incandescent.smiles 2006-12-23 ch 1, | abuseI like this - the metaphor is a refreshing one. The only thing that bothers me is the last line. It seems like it doesn't have the tone of the rest of the poem, it's like you're trying for finality, but with no punctuation, it doesn't get across all the way. Otherwise, it's good. Very good. ~Leila* PS - it should be "ex-lover's", not "ex-lovers". |
| Noir Fleurir 2006-11-24 ch 1, | abusei love the last line in this. nice work :) |
| cocaine and cherries 2006-11-14 ch 1, | abusehm. this is really strong, but when i read it, i don't know...it's like a secret someones sing-songing into my ear with a smirk. i love it. |
| Rebecca Kelsey 2006-11-14 ch 1, | abuseInteresting concept, I like it. Btw, in the summary you say "sould", did you mean soul? |