Powerful. I really love the emotions you are able to get across here. Keep writing!

I think short poems often leave a greater impression, and this one is a good example. Very simple but powerful at the same time. Love it.

Wow this is amazing its like a whole story has been told through these 5 lines, this is very intense and just great, i really like the emotions coming from this, well done, i love it!!

Lots of love
~AC~