Very nicey! )

I like your wording.

I have to admit, though, that when I read their first line I almost closed the story because I read it to the tune of the new Evanesence song... x_x

But, I'm glad I didn't.

I can relate to this, as cliche as that is to say in a review.

But, good job.

Clever flow.

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I like the structure of the whole thing, and the poem as a whole is very powerful. Nicely done!

Sad in a way but an awesome write. Could work as a song too. Thank you for the review. Keep posting and God Bless.

I like it! Your wording is really clever!

Sad but strong, good work.