 loveisonlyafourletterword 2006-11-14 . chapter 1You probably didn't mean to make some of it rhyme but if you did you should do it through out the poem. Replace the first to lines. It would be better if you set your poem out like this...
"Like the stars in teh midnight sky
Forever here to stay" instead of using punctuation for those lines.
Otherwise I think this is a good poem.
Keep writing!!
Loz |