This was wonderful. I loved it. The first two stanzas were a great way to open.
& I like the use of parenthesis on certain parts like, "little Miss hooker/** with her arms crossed over
her (broken) heart(ed) she’s staring up
at the light till she’s blind"
Amazingly written.
And I love how the entire poem itself forms a shape.
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this is another really good one. i love the style of brackets.. it makes it like..seem confused and changes the sens eof time..like its all been done before and again and in the future. the wonderland thing is cool too, very clever.

"little Miss is just some
sort of a mannequin for you to dress
anyway you like (paint her perfect
and pretty with lies and deceit" Love this part... I love this poem! It's absolutely amazing and (inser really big word for ** awesome here) XD yeah so I loved it... dark and as everyone else has said raw too... simply great...
-Laura

This is so sad, honest and true. I like the way you paint the picure of Alice, beautiful.

Superb expression - I've never seen anyone with anything close to your writing style. I love it.

Raw and graphic i loved it, i lked the way you used brackets to add in details as if the speaker has just remembered it, just like thoughts. Amazing.

"She’s named Misery, pegged up/like something beautiful (a butterfly/with broken wings) she’s bleeding/black down the backboard and/crying acid tears."

wow ... if that doesn't help explain what i've gone through the past few days then i don't know what does. it's beautiful, raw, amazing -- i love every word.

"she’s see through and hollow, emotionally/shallow and almost definitely dead/(to the world) shutting it all out, locking/herself in her own skin-prison, hung/out for everyone to see"

skin-prison? what's so freaking brilliant i don't know why anyone else hasn't used that before.

overall, i loveloveloveloveLOVE this. it's raw, painful, and everything just burns -- it hurts but it's beautiful and that's what i love about it.

I really liked this, espically the ending. It had an oddly sinister edge, like Alice wasn't going to let this guy escape...I dunno, I see things pretty odd sometimes.

i like this, it's a whirlwind of emotion and images. Possibly do better on your stanzas though. Sometimes, they're perfectly done, and other time I can see certain ones that could be separated a bit. I love the last bit, and the line about the seductress with a sword, it was really strong.

i absolutely love the way you word and do your descriptions (in all of your works),theyre always just so breathtakingly amazing.
i particually like the first & third stanzas (thats counting the first line as part of the next as well) of this piece, but it all is incredibably wow. keep writing.

This has a marvelous sustained intensity. Each word seems to shred through the screen, as the pace enhances the pulse that rushes through this. Various phrase runs in this are astounding, in that they pound the pace so quickly into the readers consciousness. Very well written.