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Jomama 2006-11-15 . chapter 1
The very ending of the prologue,

"With spells flying back and forth it was bound to happen and finally it did. It was inevitable for spells to collide but none of them expected three pairs to hit each other at the time. The resulting explosions instantly incinerated the two mages and decimated the clan armies. The mercenaries changed forms into animals and it leveled the walls. The clan survivors returned home and the mercenaries were shunned from society."

seems like you jsut gave up writing it. It doesnt make much sense because the battle hadn't ended yet.

maybe before having them all run to the hills end the battle, and tell of why the mercenaries were shunned and the dispersion of the clans men during the battle, confusion, attacking each other, anger for garth.

Yeah, thats about it for the prologue.
Archaic Wrath 2006-11-14 . chapter 1
I read the prologue, and it was pretty good. You describe the battle very well, and the characters were introduced in a decent manner. Be sure to watch for mistakes though. I caught quite a few of them, particulary this line. "Men ran do follow hi orders and soon returned with two wagons and a handcart filled with ruble." Although such a mistake isn't that bad, it makes the reader stop and stumble. Other than that, I'd say the story is good and when I can, I'll read the other chapters.
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